Suly Mayerly Monsalve

THE FANTASTIC WORLD OF LETTERS

Many stories are used with: "once upon a time", "erase once" ... but this is not a story from a story book, this is the story of life, because at the same time, the real problems are enough, with the demons that coexist in this land and that we call home.

And our character is not the princess of the mythical castle ... she is a simple girl, but perhaps, for some father or mother; your girl, is not she the most beautiful and wonderful princess? Everything is a matter of points of view.

This is a little lady named Lucy, who was fortunate to be born in a place for the camp, one in common in the newspapers and on television, nothing beyond the field that produces the food that supply the big cities, so simple, but what would happen if these fields do not pay attention? It would not be another field anymore ...

Lucy grew up among the sound of the river, the song of the birds and the smell of damp earth, daughter of farmers, she knew the crops, the sound of the animals, she studied in a rural school, a school like so many others in the country, but for her it was her paradise, the most beautiful and special, however, all the resources and support of the great educational centers, Lucia's love for her school was simple, that was her school, and for a girl who loves to study; It was her treasure, because unlike the centers of the big cities, her school was within her reach.

In this place she acquired her greatest taste, reading, since thanks to her teacher he was able to learn to read, few things separated it from a book, at least for a time; for Lucy these instruments were magical, there was nothing that resembled him, when closing his eyes he imagined so many places, so many worlds, that even the most powerful television screen could not recreate; by wandering through its pages I knew so many incredible and wonderful characters, so many formidable villains, so many incredible heroes, that no film could truly capture it.

And just like that, he became hooked on a world of dragons, vampires and fairies ... of ancient societies, futuristic worlds ...

But that love for reading was also the result of many tears, when the little prince had been read 10 times, when the old books of July Verne and dropped their yellow pages ... when the teacher had no more books to lend to Lucy, what could this beautiful princess do? How to continue with her passion?

How does a girl, a fervent reader, face a world in which it is cheaper to pay a month of television than a single book? How to give food to her mind, if the nearest bookstore is thousands of kilometers away? away?

It is difficult for parents who do not finish primary school, for a teacher who does not have the resources, how does a girl face a rude and corrupt government, which is not interested in the education of her people?

Many nights of pain tormented this girl, who only wanted to spend part of her afternoons, after helping at home, devouring stories of non-existent worlds; reaching the soul of writers who left their mark on time with their creations. Is the happiness that a dreamer deserves so difficult?

This problem may seem out of date, but perhaps if we ask ourselves, what is the last book we read? Where is the nearest bookstore? What is my favorite character from a book? Among many others ... the answers do not overwhelm us overwhelmingly ?, are we not part of that banal and simplistic world of junk programs, soap operas, things with no real value that steal our precious time and do not teach us anything?

But sometimes life is not so unfair, sometimes incredible things happen to people who, if they deserve them and despite what happened to Lucy, maybe it's something so simple, that, your cousin, friend, neighbor it happened ... for this simple little girl, it was very significant.

For his academic achievements; for her effort and dedication, she was rewarded with a simple and cheap technological object, a device that would give this girl more happiness than she gives her neighbor, your capricious and spoiled nephew.

A Tablet, a technological device so simple, that we see it every day on the street, at a bus stop, subway, or in the hands of a brawny kid who uses it exclusively for the facebook and play.

Lucy decided to use it slightly differently than we are used to, because technology is not bad or good by itself, it is the use we give to it, what is bad or good.

In the right hands, those of Lucy, that Tablet meant access to hundreds of free books and audio books, which with the teacher's support she was able to download in her new friend, since the teachers are no longer the owners of knowledge, they are the ones who they guide and support the students.

Now Lucy has the ability to read the book she wants from hundreds she has, listen to the stories narrated by the same authors through her audio books ...

This is how she was able, in addition to her studies and chores, in her free time, to immerse herself in the world she loves so much, in an infinite knowledge, in a different reality, and of course, she never forgets the pleasure of turning a page, the smell magnificent of a new book ... so he knows that when he gets his hands on some book he will enjoy it with eagerness and delicacy, and that when he grows his house will be adorned with shelves, shelves that will be sacred palaces of knowledge and imagination, shelves full of books; and who knows, maybe an old Tablet ...

Comments by Karen Yuliet Chaustre

Hi Sully

Interesting call of action you are given us in your story. It's not technology by itself which make it proper or not to humans, it's the way we use it.

I could say your story follow the structure of a single experience, which go through a moment of crisis and it becomes in a decisive change with a narrative resolution. Your story has a well-described character, settings and also is creative. The number of words is exceeded by just 5. So it's easy to correct them and fit with the tutor's recommendations.

Some suggestions I'll give you are about the position of words:

in it there will not appear dragons or horrible monsters to torment the characters: there will not appear dragons or horrible monsters that torment the characters (you could omit in it, because you are referring about the story in the sentence before).

From paragraph 5 there are possesive pronouns and adjetive referring to "he". I got a little lost because I think (clarify me if I'm wrong) you are talking about Lucy, a girl and there is not mention about a boy in the story. 

what Could this beautiful princess do?: "could" should be in lowercase.

Thanks for sharing your story.

Karen Chaustre

Comments by Angie Katherine Sánchez

Dear E-mate Suly,

Good morning

     By means the following message, I would like to tell you that I was looking at your story and your file is very clear and facilitates the understanding of the concepts, because of you expose important information based on the life experience, giving us different perspectives around the issue in a kind of persuasive narrative, for which the reader needs to consider the position or point of view proposed.

     In other words, when we write a story, this kind of narrative allows us to know a composition constituted by feelings, specific details or even experiences; in order to transmit the essence of the text around the events and sequence of elements exposed, and that is the function of the writter, investigate, study and know in perfect way the subject.

     Taking into account the above, I want to underline the part where you declare: "reaching the soul of writers who left their mark on time with their creations. Is the happiness that a dreamer deserves so difficult?" because you give evidences and examples around the topic or position proposed; searching to resolve questions and convince the reader, with the purpose to provide a complete and detailed information to facilitate the knowledge.

     Finally, in relation with the general scheme of your writing, I would like to give you some recommendations that I hope you find useful, try to be careful to the use of the personal and possesive pronouns and the capital letters, for example:

I knew so many incredible and wonderful characters,

; Your girl,

; It was his treasure,

neighbor It happened ...

In essence, your story is very realistic. Little tip: you could add a title on it.

Thanks for sharing your valuable contribution with us!

Have a good one,

Angie Sánchez